New Sloth Story
New Sloth Story
I have been saving this story for a time of unrational international crisis.
That time is now...
let me know if you see any mistakes!
And thank you for staying tuned to Pax Acidus during the beginning of World War 3.
http://www.paxacidus.com/read/gallusgallus.html
That time is now...
let me know if you see any mistakes!
And thank you for staying tuned to Pax Acidus during the beginning of World War 3.
http://www.paxacidus.com/read/gallusgallus.html
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New Sloth Story
Good story. Very strong. Foul is foul. You always write the best when your subject is sheep fucking or chicken's vaginas. Sloth the barnyard farm animal. But you should a posted this under literature. It qualifies.
New Sloth Story
Thanks Mc!
New Sloth Story
Cool. It was wierd, I read that while eating chicken. Pretty sweet story.
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Great story Sloth! I like the way you kindof peppered it with all these funny phrases. You must have worked pretty hard to come up with all that.
The story does make me glad I'm a vegetarian, though!
Only two mistakes I noticed: toward the end, during the big debate, it says "David stared trying to win some sympathetic ears. 'Where then?' Smedley demanded." It seems like you might have meant "Where then?" to have been uttered by David rather than Smedley.
And a little ways after that, it says "The others looked at David to see what his reaction would be. It was true they wanted [to] procreate." (You just need the word 'to' in there, I think)
The story does make me glad I'm a vegetarian, though!
Only two mistakes I noticed: toward the end, during the big debate, it says "David stared trying to win some sympathetic ears. 'Where then?' Smedley demanded." It seems like you might have meant "Where then?" to have been uttered by David rather than Smedley.
And a little ways after that, it says "The others looked at David to see what his reaction would be. It was true they wanted [to] procreate." (You just need the word 'to' in there, I think)
New Sloth Story
i like the story, it's a little bit of animal farm, a little bit of chicken run, and a lot of sloth.
New Sloth Story
Oh BTW McCutcheon all my writing is literature. Except maybe for Elektra Ravers
New Sloth Story
Thanks Mark for the corrections... you are really the sloth's knees. We should drink a lot more together.
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Oh yeah and Ingrid got her Green Card today!
Yippeee!
She is in London and I am in Seattle
And she wishes she was in Seattle and I wish I was in London
Ca c'est la vie!
Yippeee!
She is in London and I am in Seattle
And she wishes she was in Seattle and I wish I was in London
Ca c'est la vie!
New Sloth Story
The grass is always greener on the other side of the Atlantic.
New Sloth Story
The grass is always stronger in the Pacific Northwest and the cocaine is shit so don't even bother with that...just stick to the grass and the red wine and try not to mention the War.
New Sloth Story
Amen to all that.