You might want to revisit the verse that starts "And what of Bobby remains?" It could easily be construed as flippant which doesn't gel with the rest of the poem.
I guess that line speaks to my opinions on death and the afterlife. And although it doesn't gel with the rest of the poem it is very indicitive of my writing and my life. I seem to ruin the most sentimental moments with stabs of inappropriate language. Maybe it is to diffuse the intense emotion at the time... either way it is a thought tied to my experience with his death so i guess I'll leave it.
