New Kitten Poem (from 3 months ago)
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Beaufort Wasteland
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i don't start college til august. i don't wanna go b/c i don't want to work. i'm fucking sick of writing papers and doing calsulus problems. or actually i just don't care, that's my problem. i think everyone enjoys learning but me. i only make honor society so my parents will gimme what i want and not kick my ass i guess. i don't care what the cosine of a right triangle is, i don't care when napoleon ruled france, and i don't care how you ask for wine in a french restaurant. i mean i can't make myself care about shit that i don't. i am the most un-motivated person i know, except for english and writing, b/c i got the writing awrd at graduation so that helped motivate me some i suppose.
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mccutcheon
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I love to learn but I'd rather do it at my own pace out in the world than go back to college. I keep telling myself I'll go back for a Master's but I can't stomach the thought of being a student again. I still believe that my short public school teaching career ruined me on school.
As for Beaufort ... that is a beautiful little area to me. Of course, it's very laid back and slow paced so it may not be for someone who is more in tune with a bigger city sort of lifestyle. Hunting Island is wondrous and the marshes are right out of a Pat Conroy novel.
As for Beaufort ... that is a beautiful little area to me. Of course, it's very laid back and slow paced so it may not be for someone who is more in tune with a bigger city sort of lifestyle. Hunting Island is wondrous and the marshes are right out of a Pat Conroy novel.
I'm a little confused. Is the poem about college?
It's hard to connect with the poem because it's so
hard to figure out what it's about. Not that every
poem needs to explicity spell that out for the reader,
but there's not much to grab hold of in this one for me.
I think maybe the author got more out of writing it than readers might in reading it, which is fine, but maybe a public forum isn't the best place for it?
I'm not voting in the poll, by the way.
It's hard to connect with the poem because it's so
hard to figure out what it's about. Not that every
poem needs to explicity spell that out for the reader,
but there's not much to grab hold of in this one for me.
I think maybe the author got more out of writing it than readers might in reading it, which is fine, but maybe a public forum isn't the best place for it?
I'm not voting in the poll, by the way.
I have a hard time critiquing poetry, since i know very little about it, and to be honest, don't like most poetry. There are some poems that can draw you in and give you a feeling, either positive or negative, which is, I think, the author's intent. This poem just confuses me, and makes me feel like I am missing something. It could be a great poem that I am incapable of understanding, or it could just be a confusing poem that doesn't know what it is trying to say. I don't know. I'll leave it to the poetry conniseurs on here to critique.
Tommy, it's all you.
Tommy, it's all you.
I like this one. I can totally follow the depression of going to school and the blase nature of being 18 and surrounded by people excited over nothing and wishing I was anywhere else.
There is something that bothers me about the fragile eggshell blue line. Is that a Morrisson lyric? I don't know but I know I heard that before. Maybe something more original would match the wit and originality of the rest of the poem. I don't think I've read many poems about the horrors of college. But that reminds me exactly how I felt the first few years and I wish I had had the eloquence to write it so well. My stuff from that period is just awful.
There is something that bothers me about the fragile eggshell blue line. Is that a Morrisson lyric? I don't know but I know I heard that before. Maybe something more original would match the wit and originality of the rest of the poem. I don't think I've read many poems about the horrors of college. But that reminds me exactly how I felt the first few years and I wish I had had the eloquence to write it so well. My stuff from that period is just awful.
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sara
kitten,
Your poems are fantastic --art moves people -- your art moved me -- that's that.
You have an audience who wants to understand what you are saying -- conveying that, as the writer, is your job, not theirs.
In case you have no access to Erica Jong here's a little part of that fine poet's pie:
It starts with a guy's voice and then the girl responds with a big ole "nope"
The Commandments
"You don't really want to be a poet. First of all, if you're a woman, you have to be three times as good as any of the men. Secondly, you have to fuck everyone. And thirdly, you have to be dead."
-- a male poet, in conversation
If a woman wants to be a poet,
she should sleep near the moon with her face open;
she should walk through herself studying the landscape;
she should not write her poems in menstrual blood.
If a woman wants to be a poet,
she should run backwards circling the volcano;
she should feel for the movement along her faults;
she should not get a Ph. D. in seismography.
So that's Erica Jong on women poets
Your poems are fantastic --art moves people -- your art moved me -- that's that.
You have an audience who wants to understand what you are saying -- conveying that, as the writer, is your job, not theirs.
In case you have no access to Erica Jong here's a little part of that fine poet's pie:
It starts with a guy's voice and then the girl responds with a big ole "nope"
The Commandments
"You don't really want to be a poet. First of all, if you're a woman, you have to be three times as good as any of the men. Secondly, you have to fuck everyone. And thirdly, you have to be dead."
-- a male poet, in conversation
If a woman wants to be a poet,
she should sleep near the moon with her face open;
she should walk through herself studying the landscape;
she should not write her poems in menstrual blood.
If a woman wants to be a poet,
she should run backwards circling the volcano;
she should feel for the movement along her faults;
she should not get a Ph. D. in seismography.
So that's Erica Jong on women poets
Maverick, on Male poets
They should get their heads out of their asses and their hearts off their sleeves
They should stop worrying about whether anyone cares about their poetry; those who don't won't read it anyway, and those who do will read it regardless.
They should never complain that writing poetry never got them anywhere, because every man I know who writes poetry gets more girls because of it than the average sports watching beer-nut eating guy-even the ones who love to watch sports, eat beer nuts and write poetry.
They should realize that poetry is for the author-if others happen to trelate to it also, thats a bonus that might help get them laid, or published, not necessarily in that order.
They should stop worrying about whether anyone cares about their poetry; those who don't won't read it anyway, and those who do will read it regardless.
They should never complain that writing poetry never got them anywhere, because every man I know who writes poetry gets more girls because of it than the average sports watching beer-nut eating guy-even the ones who love to watch sports, eat beer nuts and write poetry.
They should realize that poetry is for the author-if others happen to trelate to it also, thats a bonus that might help get them laid, or published, not necessarily in that order.